Friday, December 16

Poison - Five Sentence Fiction


Tiny little story, triggered by this prompt at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

The thin gold chain felt heavy on her neck, and she had already unscrewed the hollow pendant which held one dull brown tablet. Footsteps thundered up the stairs. The pill passed her lips, tasting of rubber as she placed it gingerly between her molars, hoping - she might not need it, they might not find her.

A boot thrust into the door of her bedroom, slamming it open.

She crushed the pill between her teeth.

14 comments:

  1. Oh, this leaves me wanting to know what happens next! Dark and intense. Love it! Thanks so much for joining this week!!!

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  2. Good job! We discussed the word poison at my writing session last night. We all agreed it wouldn't be easy. You nailed it.

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  3. This is really powerful - definitely a successful first attempt!

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  4. Thank you :) I'd cut it down so much I wasn't sure if it made sense any more!

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  5. Wow, for your first that's remarkably good. Hard to write evocatively with economy, but you manage :)

    Anna

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  6. Oh I love this!! I think your first attempt at five sentence fiction was a success!!

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  7. Thank you! It was a great challenge and I'm glad I joined in :)

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  8. Jo-Anne (jtvancouver)December 17, 2011 at 12:05 AM

    The description of the pill made it even more real and panicky!  I agree with the other comment, you definitely "nailed it"! 

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  9. Stasia LoutfrakhmanovaDecember 23, 2011 at 11:52 PM

    Kamikaze! Cool fic, Das :)

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