Tiny little story, triggered by this prompt at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
The thin gold chain felt heavy on her neck, and she had
already unscrewed the hollow pendant which held one dull brown tablet. Footsteps
thundered up the stairs. The pill passed her lips, tasting of rubber as she
placed it gingerly between her molars, hoping - she might not need it, they
might not find her.
A boot thrust into the door of her bedroom, slamming it
open.
She crushed the pill between her teeth.
Oh, this leaves me wanting to know what happens next! Dark and intense. Love it! Thanks so much for joining this week!!!
ReplyDeleteGood job! We discussed the word poison at my writing session last night. We all agreed it wouldn't be easy. You nailed it.
ReplyDeleteThis is really powerful - definitely a successful first attempt!
ReplyDeleteThanks! You're too kind :)
ReplyDeleteThank you :) I'd cut it down so much I wasn't sure if it made sense any more!
ReplyDeleteWow, for your first that's remarkably good. Hard to write evocatively with economy, but you manage :)
ReplyDeleteAnna
Oh I love this!! I think your first attempt at five sentence fiction was a success!!
ReplyDeleteThank you! It was a great challenge and I'm glad I joined in :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a compliment, thanks!
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
ReplyDeleteThe description of the pill made it even more real and panicky! I agree with the other comment, you definitely "nailed it"!
ReplyDeleteThank you! :D
ReplyDeleteI love you Stas :3
ReplyDeleteKamikaze! Cool fic, Das :)
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